The Beginning
The alarm bell is screaming, it’s loud to my ears
My heart is pulsating quickly, I am crying invisible tears
The sweat is dripping from my brow
I need to get out of here! I need to get out now!
The corridor lights are absent, they have been disallowed
I weave my way through the worried, frightened crowd
I too, am scared, I need to get out
The hotel lobby is full of people rushing about
Thank god I am on the bottom floor
I struggle to get my case, out of the fire door
Dragging my hefty case; along on its two wheels
People around me oblivious, to the secret that it conceals
I have never felt so timorous before
Curse that damn, wretched bloody jaw
Hurrying through the crazed crowd, to the outside
Needing to get out of sight, needing somewhere to hide
The suitcase is making a buffeting sound
As I drag it clumsily over the cobbled ground
The weight in the case is making my arm strain
Storm clouds brewing in the sky, it starts to rain
I arrive at my car, force open the boot
Struggle to off load my crippling, ill gained loot
I am so relived that no one can see me
As most of the guests are outside the hotel lobby
In my head are vivid pictures of a mutilated whore
The sky darkens even more, the rain turns to a torrential down pour
I put the car into first gear
I am sure there is a forest some where near
I put my foot to the floor, spin off in a panic
The car lurches forward, wheels spinning manic
Hail hits of the windscreen, like bullets from a gun
I watch the residue, as down my windscreen it does run
Lighting strikes, thunder rumbles, hail stones pour down
I am so anxious; on my face I wear a frown
My windscreen wipers move wildly from left to right
Suddenly I get blinded from a flash of light
Slamming my foot to the brake
To the left, a quick swerve I involuntary make
The side of the car clips a tree
Why the hell does shit like this always happen to me?
My life used to be so great
Now my life I have grown to hate.
Many years ago I thought everything would be fine
How things have a changed over time
By K.A. Shaw (c) 2010
Comments on: "The Beginning by K.A. Shaw 2010" (31)
Vivid. Complicated. Lots of movement … moving, moving, and you feel the narrator is so tired. The tortured inner dialogue … I think you must have worked on this for some time, Katherine.
I felt that same sense that Jamie addressed in her comments…I felt like I was rushing and trying to catch my breath as I was reading this…and this sense of deep pain…wow…I need to sit back and have a cup of coffee and relax…brilliant writing.
wow thank you so much Kx
I felt the anxiety of trying to get out! great piece! thanks for sharing and thanks for stopping by my blog…two awards for you my friend enjoy
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Wow…talk about being drawn into an experience. Excellent!
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Wow Katherine, so much movement and so much pain in there…a wonderful write! Wow xxx
Thank you. I’ve been toying with my book, this will be included in there somewhere. Thank you for the confidence boost Kx
hello,
as always, you do awesome job!
the potluck poetry linking is up,
I wonder, do you want to link your 3 poems yourself?
Because it requires images, I hope that you link them up yourself…
Thanks for the attention..
love your talent.
your great katherine, i have faith and believe in you in writting poems really a poet
How things have a changed over time..
couldn’t agree more,,
great poem!
Wonderfully done. Vivid in detail, loved it.
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Wow, this is great poetry
Thank you for your comment, much apprieciated. Kx
All I can say is WOW! Loved it.
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Holy cow! I want to see the movie when it comes out…:-)
Aw thank you. You can get the book! lol
Wow what an imagination…could you imagine a date with someone who just went through that? How could composure be kept? the words “you have no idea what I’ve been through” just ring resoundingly. What dark little thoughts you have!LOL!
No, this hasn’t got any of the dark thoughts in, the rest of the book does though lol Kx
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Very cryptic. If this is the beginning, I really wonder where it led. Certainly keeps the reading wanting to continue.
Mine is here. http://razzamadazzle.wordpress.com/2010/10/03/drawing-the-elementals/
Hi, You can find out where it led if you buy the book lol, The book has many twists and turns and covers a whole range of feelings, happiness,depression,sadness and a whole lot of anger xk
Some pretty raw, intense stuff. Yeah
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Thank you Luke. Found you on twitter and am a follower. will pop over to your site soon. Thank you for dropping by Kx
This is the kind of poem that knocks the breath out of you. I felt both anxious and sad about the hopelessness I felt. Good job.
Victoria
How things have changed over time.. Wonderful… I liked it so much…
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the imagery in this poem was exciting, well done
Now I need to read more. Action and excitement took me hostage. When is the book coming out?
Hi there, thank you for your comment, it means a lot to me. The book is out and available from lulu.com
http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/kashaw
Special thanks
Kx
This creeped me out ! I could hear my own voices as I read, as I was the one living thru’ it! I think, the way you have written is very gripping and compelling, Katherine…
A restless mind – that’s what I could think of, when I read this!
I hope all’s well now though…
Very well written, my friend… I am glad you could share it with Poetry Potluck… thank you so much…